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Damian Hendrickson's avatar

I like the form and style of this poem. Almost written like code or short program - changing my thinking like a poem should.

MoTy's avatar

Thank you Damian, that was my intention. It’s structured like code, but thinks like a poem. Glad you like it.

theinkspilled's avatar

This is just brilliant, it hit me right in the gut. Wow wow. You also know I’m a huge fan of your style and structure and combined I really felt all those trapped emotions I used to avoid. Thank you so much for being here, for writing, for sharing and for supporting🖤🙏🏻🫂

MoTy's avatar

Thank you. Likewise. I almost wish you didn't understand it quite so well. Brave moves today🖤🙏🫂

theinkspilled's avatar

Brave moves indeed🫂❤️‍🔥

Forest Night's avatar

visceral and intense and poetic and so very real.

Very beautifully done.

MoTy's avatar

Thank you Forest Night, melting in every sense. Much, much, much appreciated!

h c kuhn's avatar

I’m not sure I was ready to read this. Thank you for sharing

MoTy's avatar

Thank you for reading and sorry for the lack of warning. I’m sure you’ve already recovered though:)

pen n. bolsillo's avatar

holie shit.

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This is my first „holie shit”, much appreciated!

Rea de Miranda's avatar

Fantastic visual poetry!

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Thank you so much Rea, means a lot!

Jaap STIJL's avatar

This feels claustrophobic as hell. Like being trapped inside a body that’s glitching. The tech language mixed with skin and spiders is proper unsettling. Some lines really stick with me, especially “jaw pressure calibrates me” and “rewrite(my.code).” It reads like trauma compressed into fragments. Dark but sharp.

MoTy's avatar

Yes. Trapped was the point. Thank you for staying inside it. Appreciate it, truly.

Bryn Arthur's avatar

Love/This.keep^good/Wrk.ex

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syntax.appreciated; thank_you;

Chihiro's avatar

I love how you articulated this. “Tumult crawls through skin… teeth leave bruised script… jaw pressure calibrates me.” The way you capture tension, danger, and intimacy all at once is electrifying. Every line hits with such precision, like the poem itself is alive, breathing, and dangerous. “I peel my face open… riot… too loud… too urgent.” This is haunting, fierce, and unforgettable, I’m in awe of your writing🌸

MoTy's avatar

Chihiro, you must know the feeling is mutual.

Thank you so much - my day is immediately brighter😊

Michael John Hulley II's avatar

Dark

Beauty

I love counting beauty spots…

MoTy's avatar

I'd have imagined so, Michael. Not only a poet, but a mathematician too.

Michael John Hulley II's avatar

Indeed haha.

I have been known to rigorously study shape 🙂

MoTy's avatar

geometry student keen on vinegar crisps

Michael John Hulley II's avatar

Just a couple of steps away from being an overweight polymath 🙂

MoTy's avatar

Careful there😁

Michael John Hulley II's avatar

I know. It’s quite the precipice 🙂

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MoTy's avatar

Thank you Cedric, means a lot!