What clarity! Thank you. Hope neighbours appreciate it. Could you stare into the mirror without blinking? How can you catch the displacement? Long time
Hi, MoTy: My reaction to the unique punctuation in your poems gives me a sense of an imposing technology, a digitalization of source, surrounding deeply human thoughts and introspection. (Last stanza, for example, the very personal and needed-for-life act of breathing alongside "architecture" then "of.damage.") An attempt to dehumanize in which the attempt does not succeed and the humanity comes through. I know you do not intend one way to consider your poems, so I'm sharing my take.
Wow I’ve never seen a poem using periods like this! It sort of reads as code or technological!
thank you Cipher, you guessed it right. it’s intentional; call it punctuation with abandonment issues
What clarity! Thank you. Hope neighbours appreciate it. Could you stare into the mirror without blinking? How can you catch the displacement? Long time
Blinking is optional. Displacement is much harder - it moves faster than I do. I’ve never been much of a runner. Long time indeed.
You have a power current running through you. I'm glad we are co subscribers.
The use of . () is a good flow control element.
Flow control is exactly it. () somewhat unsuccessful attempt to control the current, human leaks through. thank you 🤝
symphonic map with a tone of alignment and continuity that’s beautiful visual representation.
Thank you Queen🖤
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Hi, MoTy: My reaction to the unique punctuation in your poems gives me a sense of an imposing technology, a digitalization of source, surrounding deeply human thoughts and introspection. (Last stanza, for example, the very personal and needed-for-life act of breathing alongside "architecture" then "of.damage.") An attempt to dehumanize in which the attempt does not succeed and the humanity comes through. I know you do not intend one way to consider your poems, so I'm sharing my take.
Thanks Bruce, love your take.
I like the idea of punctuation as a machine, even though it never quite works - the human keeps spilling out.
Syntax is just my way of organising thought - the bleeding happens either way.